Here is my poem on loneliness - it’s a collection of my thoughts on lonely life…
My Lonely Life...
Early in my childhood
A thorn pierced my heart
As I grew, it tore deeper
With age, I realized it was
A thorn pierced my heart
As I grew, it tore deeper
With age, I realized it was
The thorn of loneliness…
In joy I laugh, in pain I cry
Among crowd and at party
I walk, I talk, I sit and I move
With my family, with friends
But always feel I’m alone…
Tears, wrung from my heart
Soak through my soul which
Got devoured by loneliness
The day I die, will I have to
Carry my own corpse, alone?
8 comments:
When a person feels this loneliness, there has to be a reason behind it.
We all feel lonely sometime or other, but it shouldn't be a constant companion.
Your poem emphasises a deep wound within you. It's up to you to find out what caused this wound and work on healing it.
I wish you luck & strength in finding your true self.
I am not able to believe this, Sai. I thought you are a cheerful boy, a straight forward one, who tries to be a good human being, which is very rare in these days.
I wish you will do your best to pluck that thorn and throw it away. As Margaret said, this feeling is natural, if it happens once in a while, which happens to everyone, but do not carry this negative feeling with you, Sai. You have got an affectionate mother and good friends and family, I am sure and just try to do away with this lonely feeling.
All the best to you Sai.
@Margaret, @Sandhya :
Many thanks to both of you; I never knew that I had so many people around me who always bring joy to my heart.
Yes, after writing the poem, I realized that even deep in my heart, I'm the same straight forward cheerful guy, who tries to make everyone happy.
One of my cousin who read this poem first on my blog, immediately spread it at a very fast pace to almost everyone.
This poem of mine went on to create ripples among my community of friends, cousins and relatives and I got many phone calls.
People questioned me why I hide such feelings deep inside me and share only happiness and love to the World around me.
They were asking me in what possible way they can help me to get inner happiness.
I then realized that there is no such thorn in my heart in reality, it was just imaginary.
I was rejoiced looking at the enormous response I received and the way people showed so much concern for my happiness.
Yesterday, before sleeping, I sat on the bed and thought for a minute - I have a thousand hearts which are ready to beat for me whenever I need them, so why should I worry?
I found no reason and that made me laugh to myself for writing such a poem as there is really nothing to worry in my life.
I didn’t show it to my mother because I’m sure she will shed a few tears and that will make me feel bad.
So what is the positive achievement I gained from writing this poem:
I clearly proved to myself that I was never alone in my life and will never have to be as there are so many people in this World who genuinely love me and care a lot for me.
Such a kind blessing from God - A Cheerful result for writing a sad poem… ha ha :)
carry my corpse alone-
the volume this simple sentence speaks of is astounding... but as margaret puts it, there has to be a reason behind such loneliness. and i wish for the same.
Lovely poem. I can understand that your near and dear ones were worried after reading the poem, but a poem does not always reflect the personal experience of the poet.
Dear Lala Bhai,
Well yes, you got it exactly right.
Before writing the poem, I had only this one powerful thought in my mind and I weaved all the other lines around this:
"The day I die, will I have to Carry my own corpse, alone?"
Because living alone, though painful, is always possible in life. But after dying - Can a person ever carry his own corpse?
I decided to use it as an ending line because it leaves such an influential impression on the reader's mind that - loneliness is so painful and one should never try to be alone in their life.
Dear Onkarji,
Yes, very truly said: "A poem does not always reflect the personal experience of the poet".
Imagination is the biggest gift God has bestowed upon mankind. So, anyone can imagine in his own way, any kind of emotions based on joy or sorrow. And personal experience is not compulsory.
But I have to admit here that I have some unknown pain hidden inside my heart and it is dormant most of the times.
Rarely, once in a few months, does it come out and so do I get painful thoughts and write pieces like these.
I get back to normal pretty soon and I know that such experiences are common in humans and happen to everyone.
A Message:
Sharing success with all my Dear Readers :
Thanks a million for making this simple poem "My Lonely Life..." shoot to an enormous success.
There may not be a lot of comments written here but many people reached me through all other means of communication.
Yes, I declare this poem as the most popular post of "Beyond Barriers..." till date because it was read by more than a hundred people, almost everyone in my circle of friends and relatives.
Wonder what the big secret of its success was?
Well yes, I had written the below lines when I first published this post but deleted them after two days as they created panic but by then, they already made my blog famous:
Deleted lines:
"My family, friends, relatives, classmates, well wishers, etc everyone know me as a cheerful guy, who has a lucky life, full of humourous smiles and positive attitude. But somewhere deep in my heart lives the "other side" of me..."
"Here is my poem on loneliness, it’s something more than just a simple poem - it’s a collection of my thoughts on my life, my ever lonely life…"
This poem advertised my blog among people of my community who never knew before that - I love writing, have a blog and that blogging was my favorite hobby.
I express my gratitude to everyone who read this post and showed so much more concern, making me happy in the end :)
Keep visiting "Beyond Barriers..." in future for more smiles and hope you enjoyed your brief stay.
Cheers,
Charan.
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